Don't rush it bud... Take your time, get some rest and come back at it all fresh like...
Looking good so far, though to me it seems like the poses kinda float into each other, meaning that there doesn't seem to be any distinct body poses. Like, right at the start I'd say he should lean in nice and quick and hold an 'intense' look for the first part of the dialogue (to give you an idea as to what I'm going on about)
Gotta say that I love that slap and kick combo though!