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The Factory
Alien Body For Cameron WIP
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts15 Aug 2006hi all i just finished this took me about 7 hours i know its noobiesh well thats who i am. well any way i would like crit and advices for future projects enjoy and HYPE mate i fixed it as much as possible now its only 2 iterations
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15 Aug 2006nice, for a first alien, this is pretty good. seam has disappeared, nice work!
of course, now you have to move on to texturing...
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts15 Aug 2006was it that obviouse that i suck at texturing
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15 Aug 2006I actually like it.
I'd love to see a nice body on it.
My crits would be, He has no lips. The jaw is a tad too sharp. The eyes stick out of the face when they should maybe be set in, thats the middle part, the outer part is good, just the bit around the nose, it just means there is no ridge for eyebrows or bridge for the nose. Texture is a good start I think, nice in a cartoony way but even so needs to be worked on. I think here with everything your problem is time. 7 Hours is great for modelling a head, but when you're learning you shouldnt be aiming for high speeds. The aim should be to make a decent model, full featured and good. Dont expect them to be quick, most people take days, even weeks to model full fledged characters, even tyson maybe depending on detail. -
15 Aug 2006Hey man,
Well it's a nice first attempt but remember that there's no point in rushing things...especially if you're new to CG.
Here are some crits:
-Texture needs to go
-The top eyelid is working but the bottom eyelids' creases aren't tight enough to the edge of the eye. They should act as a lip to the eye, right now they just kinda jut out (a mistake I used to make a lot too on a lot of my old models)
-Would be nice if he had some defined lips...right now they're more like creases, or beak-like
-The corner of his chin is very hard.....would be nice to soften that out a bit
Keep on truckin
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts15 Aug 2006thanks for the crits guys at the moment i am going to start creating hit body once i finish it which i hope today night i will go back to the head and give it another hour of tweak to try to fix some of the issues your guys talked about thanks again for all the crits and advices
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15 Aug 2006*Moved to the factory since it's still a work in progress, as you mentioned.
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts15 Aug 2006here is the wip for the body THIS IS FOR CAMERON since he asked to have a body hehe i hope you like it the for the rest crits please needed all the time hehe and when you look at my work please dont
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts15 Aug 2006its a tutorial to be honest but still i never worked to the movies i like to mainpulate fearther more
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts16 Aug 2006
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts16 Aug 2006
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16 Aug 2006that's quite the G. maximus there.
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts17 Aug 2006thanks all for your comments check my finished work at the 3d stills i fixed 90% of what u guys pointed out hope you like it
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25 Aug 2006cameron is an expert on alien physiognomy :p
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