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The Factory
my attempt at an animation.
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01 Sep 2006So I am by no means an animator, though I would like to think that I might be good at it someday if I were to put my head into it. So this is an idea that got started out at work, and then ran out of time, and so I figured I would start playing around with it at home. The whole theme is the cellphones breakdancing. I'm not sure how far I will take this. Right now I am seeing it as more of an exercise than anything. So any crits or comments will be helpful. Who knows, I actually might finish this one. I know it's rough, I only put like 45 minutes into it. So here it is.
-Z
Oops, can you guys move this to the wip thread? Im an idiot.
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02 Sep 2006Nice one Zach - good to see you taking the plunge into animation
Just very quick crits (my last post before collapsing into bed)
Would suggest adding a little bit of squash and stretch to the phones (You kind of have it in principle already as the bouncy guy slides up and down when he jumps... but just a touch of deformation would be cool)
You also don't want to have the Mr.Foldy begin the anticipation of the jump just at the point Mr.Bouncy crosses in front of him.
And re the jump... it's just too quick to see what's going on. It's fine to go for quick, snappy 'blink and you miss it' action.... but you'd need to heighten the aniticipation... and hold the airborne position just a touch longer.
Hope all that helps
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02 Sep 2006zach, nice start!
i don't have as detailed tips as Global since i'm not much of a character animator, but i will say i agree that they could use a little squash and stretch, or at least some bending. them being so stiff, it kinda doesn't come off as dancing, more like bouncing across the desk.
maybe music would help?
(hell, maybe there was music - i didn't have my headphones on! if there was, ignore me!)
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts02 Sep 2006u call that a begginer that is niceeee
i mean to a person like me that is itermidiat but not tyson or richard like great start i wont is this for a promotion -
02 Sep 2006wow guys, thanks for the crits. I have decided to dial it back a notch and most likely redo the rig for the phones. There are a couple more phones on the way in the future I think also. I agree with the comments you guys gave.
About the squash and stretch. I am struggling with whether I want to add that. On one hand I want everything to look photoreal, and on the other hand, I have phones dancing. I am trying to decide whether I want to give them that much character.
As for the second phone that jumps in, I want to do something completely different with it. And I plan on making an animatic with an edit for direction purposes so that I can have a good idea of my direction. I almost feel like I wasted my time on this one, but I learned alot about how much I don't know about animation from this short test though. ;D I'll be posting more of this soon hopefully. Keep an eye or two open for it.
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts02 Sep 2006
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