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The Factory
Post Hopping Animation
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04 May 2007Thought you guys might be interested to see my progress through this project for school. Will be about 3 more weeks until the finished version is done.
I'm animating an armless guy hopping across 4 posts.
I always get feedback here that my classmates miss so I'm hoping that will help out the shot a lot as well.
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04 May 2007The first pass of blocking!
The timing hasn't been touched yet, everything is even every 5 frames at the moment. Planning on doing it tomorrow once I get a little more feedback on the poses.
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04 May 2007I like it!
Definitely need more anticipation on that first jump though....he barely puts any momentum into it at all...yet he takes quite the leap. Same with the last jump too, but in the last one it isn't as noticeable.
Dang I love how those AM rigs look
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mechis 520 posts04 May 2007Agreed about the anticipation. I think you put in the anticipation poses, you just need to hold them longer.
Also f125 and 135 look a little strange... f125 stewie is twisted to the camera, but moving in a different direction, and in f135 his feet are really close together, but knees are far apart.... that's an awkward way to land.
I like the poses in your last jump.
Let us know what your mentor says!
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05 May 2007Made some adjustments to the antic pose on the first jump, and turned the feet a bit where you mentioned mech, thanks guys.
Here is the first timing pass. I removed a couple of poses on the first landing to have the momentum continue into the second jump. At first it was a very boring tempo; jump, land, jump, land, etc. So now it's mixed up a bit, looks way better I think.
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mechis 520 posts06 May 2007Looks pretty good to me!
~Mechis -
07 May 2007Finished my final blocking, made about a dozen small changes to help with the weight and keeping the momentum moving on the second jump.
http://www.jaygrenier.com/animationment ... ocking.mov
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Gets crit usually on monday so we'll see what the boss man thinks. -
07 May 2007
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12 May 2007Update!
Moving into splines, I haven't touched the head or any offsetting yet in case I get some timing notes.
http://www.jaygrenier.com/animationment ... r_fri3.mov -
TheOnlyAaron 188 posts12 May 2007Lookin' great man, I only have one thing that is sticking out to me right now, and that is the landing onto the second small pillar. It looks a little floaty, and you might want to quicken that up. Perhaps you could simply just adjust your curves to have your feet fast in, instead of what they are doing. It looks like they, and possibly the center of gravity are slowing down just a bit before they land.
But the rest is looking great, i cannot wait to see the follow through on the head, that's next! -
13 May 2007Head is there, still no offset yet until next week. I still have about 16 hrs if you guys see anything that could use improving.
I played around quite a bit with the feet and cog on that second jump like ya mentioned Aaron. Does it still look like its slowing in?
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13 May 2007Great work
yeah it still looks like it slowing downmaybe if you only raise part of the feet, and check your last landing the right foot is weird before he turns.
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13 May 2007I'm thinking that the floaty feeling on thet second jump is caused by the real change in weight of the guys head. He really slams it down on the first jump and, as he goes into the second jump, the head then looks nice and light. Plot the arc of the head from 93 to 111 and you can see it looks a way off. I think you could do it that way without changing the poses too much but you'd want to really delay the head, offsetting the parts of the spine all the way up and getting a nice wave, fom the CoG to the head.
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mechis 520 posts14 May 2007Something looked a bit off to me when I watched this anim. I couldn't figure out what it was for a sec.... and then I realized that the hips don't show the force of the landing. You have crazy overlap on the upper body when stewie lands, but his hips don't move much. I would also make the upper body motion slightly less exaggerated.
What kinds of crits did your mentor have last week?
Hope that helps!
~Mechis -
18 May 2007
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21 May 2007Finished this one. Awaiting final crits and a grade now.
http://www.jaygrenier.com/animationment ... -final.mov -
21 May 2007Very nice
but why the flames, not really useful and it looks quickly done, just the fact those columns are high was doing the trick, awesome work on the character. -
mechis 520 posts21 May 2007cool man... good job
~Mechis -
21 May 2007My mentor said the background reminded him of like hell or something, and that he guessed he was looking at flames down below, so I added them to get a laugh. I've never used particles before and was amazed that I could even do that
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21 May 2007you could of played with lighting instead suggestion flames where we can't see
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21 May 2007Hey J,
Nice to see it done...I know you won't be going back to it, but here are some comments:
-There are points throughout the whole thing were his body does hard turns, and slightly jerky movements. 2 examples of hard turns are at frames: 19-22 and 185-190. Very slight, but I noticed them on my first viewing. Simply accentuating the moving holds that follow those frames would fix that problem (or even adding extra overlap on the head)
-Ok...the first jump is looking strange. here are the problems:
a) Kicking his foot up is pretty unnatural...if you were to take a leap like that in real life, you'd never kick your foot first (at least, in the way your character does), because it would cause your hips to lean forward (as your character's hips do)...whereas in order to anticipate a jump like that, you would need to lean back.
b) Now I realize he does do a little bit of leaning back right before the jump, but instead of doing an anticipatory lean-back, he sort of just crouches for a second...which doesn't help him build up any momentum.
-The same anticipation issues are going on during the 2nd leap. He doesn't lean far enough back to create the momentum needed to move so far forward
-The third leap is much nicer imo
Overall it's really nice man! Just thought I'd give you an in-depth critique of what I feel could still be polished -
21 May 2007Thanks for the notes. I'm going to do one more revision this week so I'll try to address whatever I can from your notes combined with my mentor's.
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22 May 2007I think the hole thing looks great........flames are alright.....
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22 May 2007Thanks man! I never intended the flames to look that great, they are just in for laughs amongst my classmates. I have about 5 weeks before it will go onto my school reel so I'm trying to level up my rendering/lighting before then to make it better.
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