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The Factory
smash a bunny
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09 Oct 2007hey guys made this over the last few day, messing around with some more action-ish animation.
would really like some crits if you guys have any
http://www.joegarhan.com/stickslash.mov
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09 Oct 2007Frame numbers!!!
The pose when he is in mid-air and riiiight in between the two buildings could be a hundred times better with some small adjustments. You really want to feel that built up power as he is soaring through the air. Give it a nice line somehow and hold it for like 4-5 frames (moving hold pulling farther back into it) and then BAM snap down into the hit in like 3-4 frames. Just my suggestion.
His body is very stiff in the landing as well, it could use some love in the overlappage department I think. Maybe some squashage. That's sort of like a mixture of a sausage and a squash, but for animation.
The run in the beginning....I can't completely figure out what is bugging me about it, but I'm going to stab a guess at it being the speed versus the range of body movement. He has a huge side to side sway and a lot of up and down like he is running a marathon (rightly so, he is about to jump two walls and smash a rabbit!) however he seems to take too long to do it. It could be the camera angle how we can't see how far he travels, but I'm not sure. Just what I see. Hope it helps. -
09 Oct 2007
Maybe you could animate the rabbit attempting to whip Max's comrades into slavery and have him just cut off his arm.
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10 Oct 2007Wow Jay thanks for the advise man ill get to that stuff right away! and i finally got a nice frame counter and i forgot to turn it on hahah next time i promise.
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10 Oct 2007wow bro awesome! . nice action test
but it feels little snappy......
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18 Oct 2007
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18 Oct 2007Holy crap that got waaaay better!
I looove the pose in the middle now on 79ish, man the timing on that jump/hit feels perfect. You nailed it! The run too, way better I don't even know what you changed but I like it a lot. There seems to be more weight than before, and more effort like he is really going for it.
AWESOME.
One thing I see that could still improve possibly is his left leg on the flying 79 pose stays in the same shape for too many frames. It stays at around 90degrees bent for 10 frames and is a little distracting. Perhaps have it rise up as he's flying then overlap back down when he starts to fall. Something like that, just to break it up a little.
One more thing would be the line is still a little hard to find during his flight. That's the most dynamic part so you really want to strengthen it as much as possible.
Here you sort of have it going from bottom foot to head, but his head is turned off so it doesn't flow all the way through.
However since he is moving forward and his knee is leading (almost like when you skip and you whip your knee up nice and high it pulls you) it would be sweet to see the line flow through his knee cap.
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18 Oct 2007oh man thanks for all the help really you rock.
here is an update with your advice from the last one!
http://www.joegarhan.com/stickslash3.mov -
JonyK 42 posts18 Oct 2007That looks much better
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