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The Factory
Audi r8 vs lowmax
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Daniel 103 posts11 Feb 2008Hi guys! I want to post here my second animation! I want to learn to create funny animations (learning character animation as first target) as tyson's animations! (and as other good animators). What do you think about this ? Is it correct? How can i improve this? Thanks a lot to everyone!
http://www.finallycg.com/uploads/main.mov
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11 Feb 2008its actually very good for your second animation
the only crit i have to give is that it lacks a bit of secondary motion.
T. has a good explanary tutorial about it
there you gou
http://www.tysonibele.com/Main/main.htm
keep up the good work
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Daniel 103 posts11 Feb 2008Hi diemacht! Thanks a lot for the advice! I totally missed the tutorial about secondary motion by Tyson I will try to improve the character animation adding the secondary motion ! One simple question, all of body parts animation are made with linear interpolation. Is it correct? Or is it better beazier curve? Thanks a lot to everyone!
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11 Feb 2008I'm quite the fan of plateau'd and clamped tangents, but that might be just be me(do they even have those names in 3ds max?) anyways, its a good start daniel, i'd try some smaller pieces, like a ball bouncing or a character walk or jump before leaping into a full storyline but again, that might just be me. it's all about practice, so as long as you have time to get better your work will show, and keep trynig to be like tyson, its hard but not impossible
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12 Feb 2008Oh wow that is pretty good for your second animation. And yea adding in some secondary movement will help it out a lot, though it's easier said then done. I still suck at secondary movement, even though I know to use it lol
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Daniel 103 posts15 Feb 2008Here i am!
Thanks ridestowe for the advice! After this (i want to finish to do excercise) I'll try a smaller piece Anche thanks Darkside too! Meanwhile i have edit the firts part of the animation, trying to move shoulder and hip and adding a little movement to the feet. I also added a bus station and few other things as environment.
http://www.finallycg.com/uploads/main2.avi
One question: how can i change the material of lowmax? I can't select the mesh
One frame rendered : (i have to change the texture of the street)
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Daniel 103 posts
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21 Feb 2008good job on your work here. i know it can be a daunting task (thats why i stay away haha). one thing i noticed is the stiffness in his movements (especially in his walk, you have his arms moving in a straight line instead of a nice, loose arc). another thing would be around 2 second mark where he nearly trips, it would be good to add a short step forward there to further emphasize the motion of him catching himself.
I'm not sure what's going on around the 12s mark, where he does that hand motion. I'm guessing it's like him pushing the observer (us) away, like by trying to be discreet though it doesn't read well to me. I think that one important thing to fix then would be to aim his eyes directly at the camera, so we know its us that he is brushing off (if thats what you are trying to get at) because right now I can't tell at what or who the gesture is made toward.
I think you've done a good job of blocking in the main animation and now you should work on refining the actions (especially when it comes to emphasizing them (think exaggeration, like in traditional animation) -- I think they should be bold actions, especially towards the end when he tries to open the car door, he should really be struggling with that. ). Push it further Again good job and keep at it. -
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