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zachm 1,230 posts
Hi everyone, I post alot on here and critique peoples work from time to time. Now is everones chance to tear me a new one. Here is a Still from a small project I am working on. I will keep you posted on this thread.
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mahmoudnahmad 1,159 posts
kick ass
its really nice and realistic what renderer and how did you model the pelos please ITS AUSOM i like how the dvd packs are holding on each other excuse my bad spelling and english
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MikeWilson 638 posts
GI needs fixing (or radiosity for max i guess) and the background is really flat, and that white stuff on the trim looks really weird. But the rest of the scene is pretty sexy.
I wish I could do that..
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troubadour 207 posts
nice scene, zachm...especially like the pillows, great modelling...
you need to work on the background, though...
the sun is definately shining and in this case pictures from inside always seem to overburn the sky outside...it seems to be almost white with blueish lights...
did a little fast drawover, hope you don't mind, to show what i mean
other than that great
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zachm 1,230 posts
mahmoudnahmad: I modeled it in maya and rendered it using mental ray.
Troubador, thanks for the viz man, That was exactly what I thought when I looked it over some more.
I made some changes to it here and this is where it's at right now.
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g3org3 355 posts
I have no real critiques except for the window. The trim around the outside of the windows just looks like paint around the edges, and by that I mean it loooks really flat. I can't see anyglass, theres not a whole lot of light coming through. Also I still think the window would be blown out more, just check pictures or other arch viz renders to see what they did for sunny days.
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zachm 1,230 posts
Yeah, I know how to do it in post, but I am trying to figure out how to do the whole edge bleed thing in maya. It's a bit frustrating because the shader networks for Mental ray can get a bit convoluted. Did I say that? I meant intuitive.
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Richard 1,943 posts
i like that, i would just make the pillows a bit flufyer, they look very solid right now...
one thing that i hate about rooms is that they can't look to empty, and if they are too full, they don't look realistic anymore...
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
the lighting in the room doesnt match the lighting in the picture outside. just my 2 cents
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ALi 608 posts
Really nice job man.
All of comments above + It seems that shadows need to be a bit more sharper and that stuff in the center of room looks very dark and flat.
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iest_rob 1,671 posts
I really like the wooden floor - how did you get the effect of it being blurred?
I agree with the lighting of the outside not matching the inside - but its just a tad bit off.
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zachm 1,230 posts
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zachm 1,230 posts
Ok, I am considering this one done and moving on. I might get a wild hair later on and play around with it some more, but I have a couple more rooms to render, and I want to give those some attention. So to feed the hungry children, here you go.
C&C always welcome.
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Richard 1,943 posts
holy guacamole, this is much metter now. one thing though, behind the lamp and the couch you have some wierd skyblue reflections... is that normal? and boost up the quality of your shodows, because they are really noisy right now which spoils the picture. aslo, how are the blue and yellow things are ballanced? congrat on the lamp material. try adding a slight reflection on the windows. as for the floor, i would make it a little less blurry and a little less reflective... as for the screen capture, lol i love the antialiasing you have there.
thats all for me, i hope it helps.
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ar LutiK 455 posts
Very nice interior but in each scene the outside just bugs me, the floor not on the last one but the one before I just love.
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ALi 608 posts
Wow, much better now.
just if you reduce the noise in shadows, it would be better.
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troubadour 207 posts
now thats an improvement
i think the noise in shadows and reflections are just because this is just pimping
your overall skillz and not having the time for a wellsampled and great final render...
so that beside all i would change is to give some circular brushed anisotropic bump to the foot of the lamp...
well done, zach
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
that last one's MUCh better as far as lighting goes.
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hype 2,964 posts
i think it looks amazing! my only critque would be the grainy-ness of the shadows, but its kind of a minor thing. great work!
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zachm 1,230 posts
Thanks for all the comments guys, Yeah, the noise is from my samples not being turned all the way up. I need my computer for other stuff right now, but sometime this weekend when I can walk away from it for a while, I plan on doing another render or two with the settings turned up for a final image.
p.s. here's another quick one I did today.
-Z
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hype 2,964 posts
wow, great! if you're still using the lower samples, this room hides it better!
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Richard 1,943 posts
i really like that lamp... can you eat it?
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zachm 1,230 posts
kind of a bit late really, but I had a second before I went to bed last night, so I cranked up the sampling to be all that it could be, thought this one deserved a proper render. Though it took a while to render...
-Z
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ivanisavich 4,196 posts
Wow zach great work! Everything look superb.....the only thing I'd recommend would be to increase the intensity/brightness of the outside image behind the window. The extremely white floor under the window doesn't quite match up with the more muted background image.
That, and I see some nose goblins under the one chair....
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BColbourn 2,323 posts
that 2nd scene looks great, the only part that doesnt look real is the chairs. looks like they should be laminated wood or metal, not jsut a dull plastic.
ps: that last pic of the first scene looks gorgeous, you hav the lighting dead-on.
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zachm 1,230 posts
Thanks for the comments guys, I will definitely make those changes
-Z
