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Heavy Push assignment
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Shreds 5 posts15 Nov 2005Hi,
I'm working on a heavy push assignment and am trying to get some feedback on it. I still have cleanup that I need to do and was curious what some fellow artists' thought at this stage. I did the render just to see it rendered and didn't really plan on posting it anywhere, but I figured since I took the time to render it out, I may as well get some feedback. Thanks!
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16 Nov 2005Wow - looks great! Starts really well with great anticipation and a sense of weight, very nice footwork.
I think it could do with a little more variation as he climbs up the hill - as he doesn't seem to use the same amount of force he used at the start. (perhaps a shoulder barge or something).
There is something that bugs me about the curves in the spine - You have a nice C shape going on there but I feel that they're in the wrong order (as in, have him hunched as he starts the push, then reverse that on the extension) I appreciate that all of the above would be a lot of work to if you wanted to make changes - but just some suggestions anyhoo
PS. Nice render - but not sure you needed to post at such a high res (I couldn't get to my 'play' button lol)
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16 Nov 2005Bloody loverly mate. Well done.
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16 Nov 2005well done the only thing i could see that was a bit off is that there is no movement in his fingers i thot that might be because he doesnth have individual fingers but it looks like he does .
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16 Nov 2005You only started animating in April? Wow, it seems like we have a natural here
As for the bending of the back, well that kinda surprised me about the results of your video reference. I guess that is why video reference is so important - to make sure you get things right before you start animating.
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g3org3 355 posts16 Nov 2005There is something bugging me about the actual box going up the hill. It almost seems like there isn't enough acceleration or something. It also seems like with a box that heavy that he isn't applying enough force up the hill to keep it perfectly still when he is at the end of his push.
Im not an animator at all so let tyson or global see if i am making any sense.
Maybe make him not extend all the way but move the feet about half way through or so. I was now just looking at it and it definately looks like he just mosied up there. He should have a more strenuous walk up towards the next push.
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Shreds 5 posts17 Nov 2005Here's an update to the push. smaller window this time too!
I don't have the box sliding back down the incline so that's why there isn't any force of it pushing back onto the character when he steps up the incline.
Thanks for the suggestion though!
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17 Nov 2005Hey man...
Ok.......here's the dealy:
-The hand rub at the beginning is no longer a hand rub. It looks more like hes wiping something off of his hand, rather than "getting ready to push the big thing". I don't know if you changed it or if I'm just seeing it in a different light...but that needs some tweaking......
-At the 9 second mark, his elbows lock for 1 frame. This snaps his arms a bit and needs to be fixed
-If you go to the last frame, you can see that in his final pose, his elbows are pointing upwards, which looks very awkward....maybe have them sagging down as if he's tired
Otherwise it looks fantastic!
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