Hey Denny,
A valient effort you've got there! Here are my crits,
-Watch your arcs and weighting on the jumps. For example, on the first jump while he's landing his leg (the one he's landing on) begins to bend even before it touches the pole)....to get the full weight of his jump you'd want it to bend after touching down, so that it acts like a shock absorber for his weight (the same way it would in real life)
-very little anticipation on the second jump. Without much effort he sort of just flies towards the other pole. Maybe have him lean down a lot more before taking the leap, in a buildup of energy
-his motion on those 2 beams looks really nice...i like how he does the splits!
-the jump from teh 2 beams onto the big tube is probably the best out of all the jumps, however, it's still very floaty. If you watch it, he just nearly floats over to the base of the tube. I'd say increase the high of his jumping arc, and slow down the time he's at the height of the arc, while speeding up the time he's at the beginning and end of the arc
-when he lands on the tube and balances himself, he stands up very rigidly...smooth that out a bit
-the last two jumps are looking pretty good...I'd suggest really exaggerating the mid-air poses though. Right now his hands are sort of at his sides and his feet aren't really kicked out that far. I'd think it would look better as a sort of superman pose....ie, he leans down really far before the leap (similar to how a running would be standing right before the whistle is blown for the race to start) and then leaps forward with his hands/arms reaching out and his legs trailing behind....maybe he's almost horizontal.
And continuing on with that thought, for the last 2 jumps, maybe he's almost horizontal in the first leap, then instead of landing on the street lamp with his feet, he swings onto it with his arms (like a gymnast would jump and swing onto an acrobat-bar)...and then he does a full swining rotation all the way around (the momentum from his jump swings him all the way around) and when he lets go too soon he goes flying against the wall and smashes into it.
Anywho....nice work so far!
mechis 520 posts06 Jul 2007I'd rethink your camera move... On the jump where he's on the pipe, the camera angle doesn't allow the audience to see much of the jump. I actually didn't even see that he was riding the pipe until I watched it a second time.
