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Gallery + Critique
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3D Still + Animation
Composure
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24 Apr 2006
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24 Apr 2006
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25 Apr 2006wow, that's just brillant
I loves the poses ! -
25 Apr 2006Thanks guys
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25 Apr 2006Haha, Love will ferrel.
Thats one sexy anim! -
25 Apr 2006thats really funny
and the anim is for my opinion exellent -
25 Apr 2006Nice stuff man. I like
I believe the transitions need some smoothening up. Add more follow through and overlap
One thing I think can be improved is the part when he points with the bat. Doesn't quite match the dialogue IMO. My couple of cents.
Keep going! -
?@m 41 posts25 Apr 2006haha really funny... good job man! -
26 Apr 2006Hey man I like it a lot
Here are a couple of comments:
1) His motion is a bit stiff in some areas. Probably most notably in his first turn around (ie....after his first "sigh" when he's facing away from us, and then he turns around...the motion is a bit rigid during his first weight-shift onto his left foot)
2) In "gotta keep our composure"....the lip sync on the word "composure" looks a bit off
3) When he bends down to get his baseball bat, his pose could use a moving hold since right now he just freezes down there for a second
Everything else looks great! Really nice work and all of the poses are really strong.
I guess my only comment would be that his emotional change seems unmotivated at the beginning. He goes from sort of thoughtful and reflective to screaming and crazy for what seems like no reason....but personally I think that makes the clip all the more ridiculous and funny! -
26 Apr 2006
Nice one J... great poses and some nice transitions, though I do think that the bend down and transition from there to where he points the bat is a little awkward.
The turn itself is a little stiff - You could do with offsetting the arms a little more, loosen them up a little and find more of an arc (not always easy) - though I think that the main problem with that turn is that you are leading with the chest (as in, the upper body begins the turn first) whereas I think leading from the hips here would be more suitable (as you have the head following last)
Just going back to the moving hold thing... totally agree with Tyson on that - but just wanted to say sometimes a dead stop works, and that I noticed you have a dead stop on one pose - (on the first part of the dialogue.) All you have is a blink and eye dart - but that works a treat! -
26 Apr 2006Thanks alot guys!! Right now I've got a few revisions on freelance stuff... and it's really eating at me , cuz I haven't opened this scene since I posted it and now I really wanna work on it!
I'll post more when I work more on it.
Thanks again~!
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